Feedback from Mattruss

November 22, 2011

Time to change a few things around here.

Being completely open I’ve got to admit that my recent endeavours in connecting with the web community have, shall we say not been wildly successful. I’ve never been much of an attention hog and I’ve always been at my happiest in a niche middle ground, but with the exception of a few kind-hearted regulars – thankyou! – as a webcomic, feedback and readership on my graphic has been more than a little underwhelming.

To make a useless analogy: It feels like I’m at one of those friend of a friend‘ parties, where there’s only one person you know and everyone else is so firmly locked into their cliques you’d need a crowbar to pry them free. Time passes and you slide to the back of the room, drink at a half consumed event horizon, eyes glazed over, sending inane texts to people who’ve turned off their phones…

It all boils down to one thing: what am I doing wrong?

Not at the parties I mean, but with this whole webcomic thing. Back in Summer Paul Gravett placed huge importance upon becoming involved with relevant communities as a part of the context behind my work. Having tried this on my own terms for three months it’s time to accept that my current strategies simply aren’t working.

I contacted Matt Hemsworth on recommendation of my tutor since besides being a former student of my own Hull School of Art and Design he’s someone with a much keener understanding of illustration and comics, with a great deal more direct experience of promoting his work over the internet and elsewhere for that matter. E-mailing him over the weekend I honestly expected little more than a paragraph of advice on my comic, blog and methods but he was back to me within hours with a whole page of feedback and suggestions – so first and foremost hats off to Matt for being so awesome!

There was plenty of food for thought in what he wrote but to keep things reasonably succinct I’ll summarise the most important points he made along with my planned response:

Lettering:

This will likely be the first thing I tackle as it affects pretty much all of my graphic. While fine with my art itself he thought that my speech bubble text detracted from the overall quality, being oversized and inconsistent. Looking at it with fresh eyes I see what he means so an overhaul of the font itself and edit of all existing pages is imminent. It might be worth having it done professionally at some point to get the best results, but with so much currently in flux it would be something I’d leave for nearer completion of a collected volume.    

– ComicPress:

Excluding my uploads to ComicFury and The Duck the way I’ve archived pages under the ‘Read it!’ menu of my blog is haphazard at best. While reasonably accessible it doesn’t make for easy reading in sequence and gives an unprofessional impression. Matt’s recommendation of ComicPress as an alternative place to upload and archive in conjunction with my blog definitely sounds like a good idea as it makes for a much more inviting reading experience. In relation to this it may also be worth forking out for a proper domain name at some point too.

– Printing:

A matter I’ve only given fleeting thought to as a distant prospect. Besides pointing me in the direction of one of Hull’s more reasonably priced printers, he suggested I start printing promotional material as soon as possible to drum up interest, even a preview booklet or small poster might be worthwhile.

– Promotion:

Leading on from the last point another strong recommendation made was to get a table at a convention. Again, even if its only a teaser item or something given away for free it can only help draw interest. He had a high opinion of the Leeds Thought Bubble Festival in particular which I’ve just missed but would do well to plan ahead for next year.

– Updates:

A pretty obvious point which I ignored at my peril; it’s worth setting a specific day(s) for updates in order to build up a buzz of interest and ensure people know when more will appear. Even if I can’t make weekly uploads every time, keeping them on a fixed day no matter what would almost certainly be for the better in terms of consistency.

Lots to think about and lots to get on with then!


Meeting Paul Gravett

July 30, 2011

As you might recall, sometime ago I mentioned organising a face to face with Paul Gravett; author of more than one text in my research and a renowned figure in British comics publishing with three decades of experience. Given the relevance of his work and reputation I had no doubts how valuable such an opportunity would be but I’d be lying if I said I wasn’t extremely nervous. With the image of a formalised Q & A session in mind I prepared a concise set of questions and travelled to London’s Royal Festival Hall as arranged last Wednesday to meet at the Comica Social Club.

Thankfully my worries and unease were quickly dispelled on arrival as Paul turned out to be far more approachable than I’d guessed with the meeting being an informal discussion rather than a rigid interview. He spared a remarkably generous amount of time talking with me and while he was complimentary of my work he gave me frank criticism and advice as to how I might do better. Meanwhile my planned questions went largely neglected as I found it ironically more straightforward to improvise.

Initially – in line with aims for the Practice in Context module – I outlined the genesis of my graphic and the use of this blog, along with my plan to begin uploading to webcomic sites for greater publicity and broader feedback. He approved of all this a great deal and had plenty of suggestions as to how I might promote myself on the web; in particular emphasising the importance of interacting with other creators online and participating in group events, cross overs and other sociable activities. He also recommended work on presentation of the material and attached content, including page backdrops, summary and character profiles. Essentially considering interaction, polish and accessibility.

Moving on I explained my influences in depth, citing inspiration from regular cyberpunk sources along with my exploration and assimilation of the genre’s roots in detective fiction and film noir. Again Paul seemed to agree with the relevance of this to my main graphic with a few of his recommendations actually being ones I’d already looked at (though I’d do well to research the suggestions I haven’t.)

Here, he became curious about my planning and work methods so I explained that I have a complete (albeit still developing) script but he was most interested in how I roughed out the draft pages themselves. As an alternative to doing these one page at a time in detail, it was suggested that I consider the approach used by Alan Moore of drafting a work through to the end in basic thumbnails. This approach has the benefits of not being overly time consuming while providing a realistic overview of an entire project and how many pages will be required in total. As an inarguably superior way of managing my project compared to ploughing ahead blindly I’ll definitely set about using this technique once I’ve prepared my 3rd (and likely final) draft of the script.

At this point I should mention that I’d cautiously brought printed versions of the Branch’s finished pages and some concept art with me, being somewhat uncertain whether it would be a good idea to show them prematurely. Ultimately it proved fortunate that I brought them along as they prompted some of the most important feedback I received.

On the positives; Paul approved of the chapter cover along with much of the general style and the dialogue, citing page 6 and the conversation about ‘the C word’ as being especially good. On the negatives; the largest criticisms concerned moments of uneven pacing and clunky scene changes, specifically page 7 – this page was something of knee jerk reaction my tutors’ call for more experimentation in the visuals and in this regard I consider it a success, on the other hand, as Paul highlighted it enters the station interior prematurely being more confusing than it is compelling.

Back in planning I wrote a lot about the importance of establishing a credible setting and a great deal of this could be a result of how its introduced. Looking at the progression of pages following Curt’s journey onto the station, it would make far more sense to follow the airlock scene with a grand reveal of Branch’s interior, rather than undermining it with a restricted back alley scene which adds little to the main narrative. Out of context I like the page a lot but I can hardly ignore a professional opinion or the bigger (and far more important) picture, after thinking hard about it I’ve decided to cut it from the main narrative and relegate it concept art in favour of a more suitable introduction.

On a related note, Paul also criticised the angles used suggesting more large scale panels; depicting views further back to create greater awareness of the setting and allow the scenes to breathe. This is a weakness I am reasonably aware of and have been attempting to address with more establishers, but I must admit I’m still falling back on face closeups and the like a little too often, creating more claustrophobia than warranted and resorting to what is ultimately an easy way out over more complex compositions. I’ll be sure to remedy this in future.

He made one last suggestion about the artwork, telling me I should be more adventurous in my use of colour. I’ve consciously been quite muted thus far, sticking to brown/grey, orange/blue palettes but again it’s a fair point. If I take risks and step out of my comfort zone I have a better chance of producing eye-catching pages which leap out at the viewer rather than simmer quietly. As with the other elements I hope to ramp the colour scheme up alongside the story, developing it in accordance with the narrative tension.

Finally, I concluded my questions by asking what sort of approach I might take towards publishing and distribution in the near future. His response to this was suggesting self publishing options; essentially setting up shop at comic conventions and selling print versions of my work from a table. In particular he emphasised the importance of selling complete works as opposed to fragments or issues as buyers will always find a complete narrative more appealing – its something which enforces my longterm decision to complete the graphic outside of the MA if necessary, delivering a prototype for my final assessment rather than rushing something fundamentally incomplete to a finish.

One last matter Paul covered was that of logos and general iconography, making memorable images and symbols readers will associate with my graphic. I have thought about this to a degree but I must admit some reluctance to forcibly pursue this in my work, I’m certainly aiming to form some reoccurring motifs – primarily relating to cyborg enhancements – but my hope is that they will emerge gradually rather than being heavy handedly emphasised. Still, it’s definitely something to keep in mind throughout production. In summary the goal of such activity would ultimately be catching attention and getting noticed by publishers; establishing oneself in the amateur scene before taking a shot at the professional one.

Anyway, that should cover all the major points. A massive thank you to Paul Gravett once again for taking the time to talk to a complete stranger, with any luck my project’s been nudged closer to the right track with a greater finished result and greater long-term prospects.


Research Methods and Development: Feedback

July 21, 2011

As the title summarises I received my folders back today along with a satisfactory grade. My research and engagement with subject matter were cited as the strongest areas of the project, though naturally there were some criticisms made.

Of these the one I really can’t argue with was a recommendation from my tutor to do more life studies in order to improve my drawing skills. I’d never claim the style of my drawings is particularly set on realism – leaning more towards a stylised look – but then again my figures are often rigid and slightly wonky in proportion, while my clothing tends to look stiff and unnatural. In other words more practice wouldn’t hurt, and while the sessions I formerly attended have long since finished for summer at the very least I could find photos or non-nudes who’ll pose for me.

I’ll admit that the other criticisms didn’t sit quite so well with me initially, though following a discussion with the tutors involved I did see their reasoning. The main one was over my failure to take enough creative risks with my art, feeding in more experimental influences along with the noir stylings I promised. This is true, I haven’t thus far but I have some thought behind it.

Scott McCloud spoke of the balance between clarity and intensity in Making Comics (2006) writing that ‘sometimes just telling straight, with clarity as your guide, is the best way for stories to gather steam and then strike like lightning when it counts.’ (p51) This is advice I took to heart, along with a general intention to follow the noir template of a descent into darkness; with more exaggerated features such as high contrast lighting and expressive shadows appearing as the story progresses. In other words, a visual crescendo to match the narrative one.

As a result of this my pages so far have been slightly bland and straightforward by design. Had I cloaked everything in angular shadowing from the off I imagine it would not only dull the dramatic effect of later scenes, but would have also made my start appear pretentious and heavy-handed; forcing in stylised elements for the sake of it rather than for a reason.

That said, if I suddenly introduce these more intense visuals twenty pages down the line there is a danger it will seem like a complete change in style rather than mood. Hopefully the image I used for the act cover (below) foreshadows their introduction to some degree but perhaps it would be worth bringing them in sooner and taking a risk with the art rather than playing it safe for too long.

Finally, there was also criticism of the project’s scope with the length of my script and the projected 100 pages considered likely to inhibit my creativity in the drive for completion. This isn’t an unreasonable point as I have set myself an ambitious task, however it seems a shame to squander this opportunity creating another short when I have the chance to push myself and create something more substantial. The idea of chopping away significant portions of the script doesn’t sit well with me since they would severely detract from overall narrative, while I also don’t think it’s unreasonable to say I’m treating each page with appropriate care and thought.

Fortunately they did suggest a compromise I can live with; treating the graphic as something closer to issues than a complete volume. Besides giving more room for experimentation and alteration it would also mean that I don’t have to sweat over delivering a finished article by the end of the MA – should worst come to worst letting me deliver a few issues and the remainder of the script as evidence. Obviously I hope it doesn’t come to this, but it’s stopped me worrying quite so much and at least means I won’t be rushing something sub par to a forcible conclusion.

So, overall not exactly horrifying feedback but plenty of food for thought all the same and as ever lots to be getting on with.


Good news and further feedback

July 16, 2011

Just a brief update on a couple of small but significant developments.

In relation to Practice in Context; Paul Gravett – one of my aforementioned professional contacts – unexpectedly got back to me and it looks like there’ll be an opportunity for a face to face in the near future! As someone whose written books I’ve referred to on several occasions and had in depth involvement with comics publishing for over two decades he’ll definitely be an invaluable source in my studies. In the meantime I need to make sure my planned questions are as concise and pertinent as possible.

Of less exciting but still fair importance; I received additional feedback on my script from a good friend (thanks Xellun!). I’m sure this would appear to suggest bias but I’m confident the criticism was honest, particularly as the positive and negative points identified are very similar to last set of feedback I got. The growing consensus appears to be that the final act of the story has too much superfluous dialogue, while a key antagonist’s reveal has been described – to quote the professional terminology used by both sources – as a bit of a “Scooby-Doo”…

It’s thankfully all fixable with no severe structural problems requiring drastic narrative alterations. There will certainly be tweaking aplenty before the pages are drawn, but it’s reassuring to hear the narrative basis is as sound as I’d hoped.


Practice in Context: Proposal Feedback

July 6, 2011

Looks like I might have to rethink that former point I made about “doing less in the library” slightly

Having just received feedback on my recent proposal for the Practice in Context module there were some key criticisms of my plan for the next few months; in particular a strong point was made of me lacking much in the way of theoretical sources and journals,  something I can’t really argue with. While I’ve been doing a fair few write ups on films, books and comics in the cyberpunk vein – and more recently the detective/noir genre – its true that I’ve been making most of the connections and observations myself, rather than referring to published sources on the matter. Frankly, this is a dimension of my studies I’ve neglected far longer than I should have so it looks like I’ll be scouring library archives in the near future for relevant papers and publications on my subject matter – being better informed certainly wouldn’t hurt.

The other big criticism that was made besides this was my lack of a clear-cut question or goal to address in the module’s concluding academic essay. I’d outlined a vague intention to ‘build up a picture of the most successful approaches in the comic book industry’ without providing a firm statement of intent. The idea of having everything planned out in advance is one which doesn’t sit particularly well with me given the changeable nature of my schedule and possible approaches, many of the professionals I’ve contacted are yet to respond to my pleas for their time and I’m still not 100% exactly what I’ll be attending when.

Much as my plan of action remains tentative, so the question itself is liable to change but for sake of providing a fixed focus to begin working around I have devised the following guideline for myself:

‘Researching the context of my medium/chosen genre and identifying comparable conventions within them, which niches and publication/distribution routes would be most appropriate to my work?’

I realise that sounds a little clunky, but for now at least it gives me a better idea of the exact direction my research should be heading in. The best thing I can do for now is just to push forward and reinforce the ideas more considerately as they develop.